Wasted words

Every
Under
Be
Wash
Your
We
Words wasted on nonsense
Still
Define
Go
Very
Thoughtless without effort you speak
Can
Willow
Fourth
Meaning
Say it is easy and you are mindleaping
Dear
End
Little
Free
Total
Brave to make it
Minds work around us differently
Teach yours to be open

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10 thoughts on “Wasted words

  1. I like this poem too. I especially like the way the list of single words illustrates “Words wasted on nonsense.” You don’t just say that people talk a lot of nonsense, you show it, you give an example. And then you go on to explain why the words are “wasted.” The rest of us talk easily and “without effort,” but you don’t. Your mind, like all minds, works differently. For you words are valuable and hard to get out. For you they are precious. As for keeping my mind open, I try–but your words help a lot. grandpa

    • Nick, The comment above, made at 5:04 p.m. was mine, not Bev’s. I just happened to be working on her machine. Grandpa

  2. I’m stunned. I’ve always admired your writing. You’re smart, sensitive,empathic and one hell of a wordsmith. You use words in an idiosyncratic,beguiling, fascinating manner. And you always leave room in your poetry or prose for people to enter into it and deepen it with their own interpretation. But now you have topped it all off with this graphic thing. You aren’t just enlightening your poetry with a graphic presentation, you are presenting a graphic piece of art that contains a poem. I love the way this poem looks on paper. I like the way the individual words in the column are short and flow from one line to another without getting in the way of the meaning or meter I like the way the last three lines provide an architectural foundation and support for the long column part of the poem and I like many other things about the structure. But, of course, I also love the poem. It is a beautiful piece of advocacy. You are brave to make it but blessed with talent and i say this not with family bias but with an open mind. Keep it up and publish.

    • Well supported in really great loneman opportunities to soar.
      Keep me going.
      You say exciting words of motivation.

  3. Nick,
    I like the sound of the poem, the way the single lines with one word are “punctuated” by a longer line. I haven’t seen this sort of thing done before, so it’s a bit innovative, and it does indeed work. Like most of your poems, the meaning is open to a lot of interpretation. But I’m not sure it has to have a lot of obvious meaning; like music, a poem can just create a mood, which is what this poem did for me — a mood saying that we should not take things for granted, not take things too seriously, but keep an open mind.
    DJ

  4. Nick, this is the very essence of poetry, and at a very young age you have found your voice – many poets struggle for years to get to this point. Each of your poems shows not only deep thought and awareness of yourself, but of others, each with his/her own way of interpreting the world. I found that as I went over this poem it opened up for me in ways that I could not have anticipated.
    The words you chose continue to resonate; it is a poem that will be read many times. The structure of the poem with single words, each part of a column, also allows each word to “beg the reader” to think, to ponder, to let his/her mind go into a reverie as it stands alone on the page.
    Then the interjection of horizontal lines, like guideposts on a journey, make the reader stop and ponder:
    Words wasted on nonsense
    Thoughtless without effort you speak
    Say it is easy and you are mindleaping
    Then at the end you pull it together with your closing lines that remind me of the closing lines of a sonnet, but have more power because of the unique structure of this poem. There is also such wisdom in your admonition to the reader –
    “Brave to make it
    Minds work around us differently
    Teach yours to be open.”
    This is so profound! It echoes the awareness of the ancient shamans who taught that for each person he/she is the center of the universe, and for each person that universe is a different experience and journey through life. And your admonition to the reader is like that of the ancient oracles – but brought into the 21st century. I am in awe of your poetry. Thank you for sharing it with me. Grandma Marjorie

    • Grandma,
      More to come. Mom says dad was some like me. Dad liked his childhood.
      Now dad loves my childhood. Nick.

  5. HiNick. I am a friend of Sarah’s. I’m so glad she asked me to read your blog. keep on writing!

    You make me think about this phrase, “talking about nothing”. One one side, babbling or chit chat can seem like wasted words, useless and empty. Yet, “talk about nothing” is also functional. It helps people connect and helps them practice language. I imagine that many great poems, essays, stories and books evolved from just free-form writing, a deviation on “talking about nothing” until a kernel of truth and poignancy emerges.
    Deb

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